Exploratory Draft

Yinxuan Liu

Professor Seward

Writing 39A/ Letter of Introduction

Nov. 19, 2021

Letter of Introduction

For the writing draft this week, I decided to use the same thesis I used for Rankine’s imitation, but shift it to a more smoother and comprehensive one. In other words, I shift the thesis from “One should never compromise with others' expectations” to “one should never shape their characteristics, thoughts, even their future career based on other’s expectations and opinions.” Further, after reading “Walking While Black” by Garnette Cadogan I decided to structure my plot from my youth progressively to the present, which first I considered “act like other’s expectations” as beneficial then struggled from it. Then, after reflecting about my chat with Mabel, I would illustrate another story related to my shifts of mind. Also, I would include another story from celebrities to further support my thesis.

For my questions, since I only started the first half of my essay, I would ask two questions about my outline since it is already a comprehensive one. Firstly, would the outline be clear enough about each anecdote I would write and the argument I’m trying to make? Secondly, the first part of my essay presents an understandable reason why I find “meeting others expectations” beneficial.

Rough Draft

Yinxuan Liu

Professor Seward

Writing 39A/ Letter of Introduction

Nov 28, 2021

Letter of Introduction

This week I finished my rough draft for the “What is your Truth” essay, where I construct the story through a timeline, where first I find acting for others beneficial then gradually suffer from it. Then, later, with the help of Mabel, I’m no longer confused and keep pursuing my ambition. In addition, even though I used the same story from Rankine’s Imitation Draft, I added more details, as well as shifted certain perspectives to better support my idea. However, for my paper I failed to find a similar story or celebrity that related to it, thus for the final draft, I would first add another outside resource about a celebrity who got the same experience or opposite experience with me, also a “food for thought” at the end of the passage.

For my two questions, firstly, would my story convey a clear thesis and argument? Secondly, did I provide a clear shift of opinions for my paper?