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twitter packs & lockscreensStudent #2 Essay:

Carbajal "No Country For Old Men" Rhetorical Analysis.docx

The comments I left on Student #2's Essay:

Hi Isaac! Overall, amazing job! To start off, I really like the way you introduced the characters of the book in your introduction paragraph. It's very unique! :)

Faith G. Klijian, Feb 5 at 12:37am

In your second paragraph, you start explaining who Llewelyn portrays and the type of person he is, but then you begin to talk about how morally, he is not the greatest person. You say if he were to do something else, the consequences of his actions would have been different. It sounds a little passive aggressive in a way, if that makes sense. You might want to consider easing into how he could have done things differently because it does sound a tad overbearing.

Faith G. Klijian, Feb 5 at 12:40am

Your essay is already very well-structured and sturdy as it is, but I would suggest adding some evidence from the book to help back up your claims.

Faith G. Klijian, Feb 5 at 12:41am

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