Hello Jivana, 

I think your topic is really interesting and worth digging since wildfire is one of the most concerning factors that climate change causes. It damages the natural environment, bringing survival pressure to local species, but at the same time, wildfires also bring huge economic and life costs to human society. Therefore, it is important to remind people of the seriousness of this problem and let governments and related departments take action timely. The solution introduced in your draft is constructive, you analyzed its purpose and some of the specific strategies, as well as its disadvantages and works that still needed to be done. I enjoyed reading your essay, but I believe there is a lot of room for improvement.

The requirement for the AP is to write approximately 2000 words of multimodal composition; that to be said, there should be pictures or data to support the arguments you make. The current draft you submitted contains a lot of great proposals, so it will be better if you can provide a deeper analysis using more sources and evidence. For example, in the first paragraph, you introduced California's Wildfire and Forest Resilience Plan, which intends to reduce wildfires by increasing the prevention capacity of the forests. In my opinion, you can expand this argument and discuss why the prevention capacity is so important, and what exactly researchers do to increase this ability. Moreover, using multiple resources greatly enables you to have a more comprehensive understanding of your topic, and also helps you get a better idea about whether this plan is applicable or reliable. 

In the second paragraph, you emphasized the problem of funding, which I found also crucial to discuss. The idea is to gather a big amount of money to solve the wildfire problem at once, but the downside is that many of the citizens are likely to be reluctant to pay. This is a concerning issue for both the government and the local environment because not having enough money leads to a low possibility to control wildfires. Again, deeper analysis and more resources will make your essay more persuasive. The total point I give you is 30/35. Good luck with your final draft!