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These excerpts are pertaining to the same topics that were shown in my Advocacy drafts. However, the language is more precise which makes my arguments more clear. The micro-organization seems to flow well in these paragraphs. The language is not repeptitive and these excerpts show successfully application of the criticisms received in the HCP.

Figure 1: This excerpt significantly improved mainly in precision and clarity. There is no sign of repetition in this excerpt.

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Figure 2: This excerpt improved mainly in micro-organization. It also shows no sign of repetition and the language is precise and clear.

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