These are a couple of excerpts from my HCP draft showing how my paragraphs are focused on a single topic. There are no drawn out analyses and the explanations I give are confined which makes the paragraphs stay on topic. Thus, this shows improvement in both macro-organization and paragraph density.

Figure 1: This excerpt discusses high healthcare costs due to inflation. The topic of price inflation is clear and the rest of the paragraph is focused solely on this topic.

Figure 2: This excerpt shows how it is clear that this paragraph is focused on lack of preventive care. Again, the rest of the paragraph focuses on this topic alone.