One way in which the Brothers Grimm project 19^th century sexist ideals is through Cinderella’s passive and subservient nature. This nature then turns to stereotypes that only fabricate the female roles as docile and that highlight sexist aspects that sealed the inequality between the sexes. Throughout the tale, the Brothers Grimm emphasize Cinderella’s inability to speak out against injustice by rendering her passive. From the instant that she was turned into the domestic servant, she never spoke against her stepmother nor stepsisters. She was forced to wake up early every morning and work unceasingly day and night without questioning nor refusal to comply with the mandates she was given. She was even forced to pick up lentils from hot ashes in order to be obedient and fulfill her stepmother’s requests. Her efforts to live passively in her “enslavement” leads to believe that women must comply with their domestic duties without question or refusing, regardless of the extremity of the task. To emphasize even more the idea of sexism translated in Cinderella, we can analyze the idea that her passivity brings her joy and bliss at the end of the tale. After Cinderella meets the Prince, she still take no initiative to find him and tale him of her familial situation. When the Prince finds her however, they ride away in his horse to live their love. By rewarding Cinderella for lack of initiative, need of courage, and her passivity, the brothers Grimm are telling us that in order to be happy you must be submissive and accept your feminine role in society as the caretakers of the home. In the entirety of the tale, being submissive reflect good female values because at the end of the day their submissiveness is rewarded with a happy ending.

Commentary: I decided to incorporate this paragraph because it condenses one of my arguments quite well. In this paragraph, I argue how the character of Cinderella is articulated and molded as a passive one, to be more specific as a passive woman. This paragraph focus specifically on this, whereas in the past I would add more than one idea into the same paragraph. So drafting and organizing definitely allowed me to progress by condensing ideas and develop clarity in my arguments. 

Draft 2 paragraph:

Even when Cinderella has received global praise for its eloquence in helping us notice our unity as one species, it has also helped us notice our misfits in the world. Ironically, Cinderella is an eccentric and outdated tale to our world and as a consequence we have relied on modifications to make them adequate and appropriate for our children. The process of sanitation itself proves that Cinderella wouldn’t be relinquished as it was originally crafted. However, corporations that underwent through this process did so with a fixed mindset: profit. By stereotyping children as the common audience of fairy tales, main corporations who claimed rights to such fairy tales deliberately changed the entire scheme, while simultaneously eliminating the historical and cultural knowledge that they had acclaimed over time. In essence, we can blame Disney’s ambition for economic gain and for altering the focus of fairy tales to the heads of children. Through copious alterations like the removal of obscene violence, Disney has distorted and alluded to idea that fairy tales were always meant for children. 

 Commentary: I decided to use this example to show how i tended to incorporate more than one idea into one paragraph. The first two sentences of this paragraph are ideas that can stand independently: The first sentence talks about how Cinderella tries to unite us, but all it does is the opposite. This is an interesting idea that could stand as its own as long as it is supported with relevant evidence. This idea also does not carry over through the paragraph. So as I advanced to the final draft, this paragraph was out!