At the first draft of RA, I had some problem about my essay's structure. I had a meeting with my professor after I finished m first draft. And she told me that my essay still need some improvement. This RA essay needed to focus on the novel we read, "The White Tiger". I chose corruption topic from this novel, the author discusses in this novel. And professor told me that I needed to have connection with the novel in the whole essay. So that after the first draft, I made some changes for novel, I build some explanation after my examples and gave them the connections with the novel we read. This was a big challenge for me, because in the essays I wrote before, I just needed to give one or two examples from the novel we read, but this time I need to write a 6 pages essays, so that I made a long time to structure my essay at the begining, and at the final draft, my essay was about 1600 words. 

I think that the RA drafting process made me learnt how to revise a article. I never really revise a essay very carefully. In the past two years, I just revised some grammar errors, and revised what instructor told me to do, but I never revised my essay by myself. So this time's work is very important for me to improve my drafting skills. 

Draft 2 to Draft 3:

This revision was after I had a meeting with instructor, and she pointed out some of the main points I need to revise in the essay.

Revision 1

Original:

 It also makes mention of the important themes include corruption in Indian politics and society, religious tensions between Muslims and Hindus, as well as the tensions between China and India.

Revision:

Adiga also mentions important themes include corruption in Indian politics and society, religious tensions between Muslims and Hindus, as well as servant class use immoral approaches to get rid of poverty (Goh, 2011) to assail India government's nasty actions because many people in India are struggling in low class.

At the meeting time, instructor told me that in the first paragraph, I needed a strong main idea sentence, and pointed out the main idea. Also I should change the "I" in the original sentence to "Adiga", it would help me to clear the thesis. And I should point out the main idea for why Adiga points out this main idea, for my essay, is the corruption in India. So I made the change, and I think the feedback was very helpful for me, and I though my essay became more clear after I did this revision. 

Revision 2

Original: 

Adiga use a lot of different examples of the corruption to show that new India, the India that is suppose to be advancing and evolving in the eyes of China’s premier.

Revision:

I moved this sentence from the end of paragraph 2 to the begining of paragraph 2. 

At the meeting time, instructor gave me some advice for every example in my essay, I should gave a paraphrase in the begining of each paragraph and after each example, I should write a explanation, and then connect with the novel we read. This words I remembered until now, even I did not write it down. In the first draft, I was not clearly know what I should write, and I thought my logical was not very clear. The instructor's feedback helped me a lot, I knew what should I write and the logical for my essay, so I made this change. 

Revision 3

Original:

But the fact is that India is just filled with greed and self-serving, arrogant men using dirty way to climb up the social and political ladders.

Every citizens criticizes corruption and most of people would feel unfair about it, but we still can’t avoid from the appearance of corruption.

Revision:

Adiga uses examples in the novel to show these situations in new India and he wants to let more people know that the truth new India is not like their image, the new India is filled with corruptions and low class people are struggling.

Even though at that time many people it was a miracle that Indian economic grown very fast, but like Adiga's words, this miracle was filled of corruptions and the suffering from low class people in India. The narrator in the novel Balram demonstrates that ‘economic miracle’ of India is just a superficial view, and narrate the truth of ‘economic miracle’-exchange money with moral.  Every citizen criticizes corruption and most of people would feel unfair about it, but we still can’t avoid from the appearance of corruption.

At the meeting time, instructor pointed out my shortage  at the ending of paragraph 2 and the begining of paragraph 3, she said that I should have a transition between these two paragraph. I did not find this point when I was writing. Because in English I was not good at the structure, so I did some wrong in the first draft. After I got the feedback, I felt my shortage, and I tried to fix this problem. I made the connection with the paragraph 2 and the paragraph 3, and I made these two paragraph transit more gently.