At the conference time, my instructor gave me some good suggestions to revise my project. After I went to the conference, my project was not tally with the genre that I chose. She told me that I should have some place to attract audiences and also I should write some sentences like some people's words to make my project more like a real news article. 

From this section, I learnt that a essay should be revise many times. Nobody could write a successful article at the first time. So every essay need to be revised. And I found that each kind of article has the different writing method, so I should learn more about it. 

 Revision 1:

 Revision:

These people are big factor to make two big events happened this year, and there are two events could be good examples for anti-globalization.

So there is a question, these things happened casual or inevitable?

At the conference time, my instructor told me that my project is a news paper article, so there should be some sentences in my project could attract my audiences, so they will read my article. So I put these two sentences in two paragraphs, I think this two sentences could make people more interested in my article.

 Revision 2

Original:

Globalization became successful from World War two, the globalization made many people feel different culture and realized the different between people in different countries. Companies have local, foreign and immigrants employs, also the schools. People have different cultures, complexions and religions, globalization made people all over the world aggregate at one place.

Revision:

The first thing, we need to know what actually globalization is. If you search in Google, the definition of globalization is Globalization implies the opening of local and nationalistic perspectives to a broader outlook of an interconnected and interdependent world with free transfer of capital, goods, and services across national frontiers. However, it does not include unhindered movement of labor and, as suggested by some economists, may hurt smaller or fragile economies if applied indiscriminately. This is the academically definition of globalization, but it is too tedious and difficult to understand. Let me simplify it, the globalization is a phenomenon that make our world become one part, not like hundreds year before, people in one mainland thought the world just had their mainland and they could not contact with the people in other mainland. Globalization became successful from World War two, the globalization made many people feel different culture and realized the different between people in different countries. Companies have local, foreign and immigrants employs, also the schools. People have different cultures, complexions and religions, globalization made people all over the world aggregate at one place. And there is a important thing for globalization, many people get benefit from that, like myself, I went to American college, and got the best education here, so I was a beneficiary from globalization. Many people got benefits from globalization, but there are still big amount of people did not get benefit from globalization, or they got hurt from globalization, so these people do not like globalization. These people are big factor to make two big events happened this year, and there are two events could be good examples for anti-globalization.

At the first time, I just had a few ideas about my project, and I thought the first part of my project was too short, so I added some content on the first part, it is liking a introduction of my project.